My love you are the one

I’m sorry the first chapter was good the you put the same thing on the next chapter but just worded differently and with a different way to the same outcome then the next two chapters are good but the chapter after that is just a repeat again it’s so confusing I think you should redo this whole thing before you add anymore chapters and take your time on them if you want to do them in you can do them in bulk and then send them to your friends or whatever have them look over it if they find something wrong with it, they can point out whatever it is and fix it. You edit it and then you can post it.

Yep am sure gonna read this like this it's lit

Very descriptive nice storytelling and over whole the background is lovely, this is a great fantasy sci fi vibe. The world-building and the plot has been carefully put effort into and well thought out and just the whole novel is a great start and this is a good novel for anyone who into these type of novel

"Mama I'm sorry, I'm sorry mama, I wanna spend more time with you... I'll pray every night mama... I guess goodbye mama, I love you." Chris says his final goodbyes crying his heart out

suddenly Eva took off her mask and show her real bare face to Jack. looking at Eva Jack 's eyes and mouth both opened widely. he gulped but no word came out from his mouth. an angel alluring face,  sharp nose ,beautiful eye brows, glossy red cherry lips .buy what more attractive are two most beautiful and Enchanting deep green crystal eyes which looked like a deep green sea who is pulling your soul deeper and deeper.

That's only recall of my dream when I was only ten years old. I have these weird dreams back then, now I am six years later when I dreamed about the mysterious temple. Still now, questioning these events.

She raised her thoughts in front of Shen Ya.

I gave it my all, pulling her backwards and fucking this twenty-something young beauty. Enjoying the feel of her tender skin, seeing the curve of her back, as well as her round ass.